【雅思作文批改】5分：词汇拼写错误严重
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【雅思作文批改】5分：词汇拼写错误严重
今天这位同学是图表作文，最大的问题是词汇拼写错误严重，其实整体还是很不错，这样的低级错误可要少犯啊，因为几个单词拉低了整篇文章的分数就太不值得了！
作文题目：
作文内容：
The line graph compared[b1] changes of unemployment among 16-24 age group with overall unemployment figures over a period of 20 years in England[b2] .
It is clear that those aged 16-24 who lived in London acoounted[b3] for the highest rate of unemploment[b4] throughout this period. And also, the percentage of unemployment among aged 16-24-year old people saw an overall upward trend over a period of 20 years, while the overall unemployment rate in London and the rest of England witnessed a slightly downward trend.
In 1993, around 22% of people aged 16-24 who lived in England[b5] were unemployed, while the same age group living in the rest of England stood at approximately 18%. However, the overall unemplyment[b6] rate in London and the rest of England was slightly lower, at 14% and 10% respectively. Over the next 10 years, there was a similarily downward trend seenamong the four different groups, reaching the lowest point in 2002.
From the 2002 onwards, the figures for those living in London and the rest of England held a [b7] steady at this level, at 8% and 9% respectively in 2012, despite of fluctuation between 2006 and 2009. However, there was a dramatically upward trend seen among those aged 16-24 between 2002 and 2012. The unemployment rate of 16-24 age group living in London and the rest of England saw a dramatically increase, from 15% to 25% and from 12% to 20 % respectively.
[b1]这里用原形 compares
[b2]这里对图表的表述有些问题，图表是四条线相互对比，改为the changes of the unemployed proportion rates in England from 1993 to 2012.
[b3]拼写错误 accounted
[b4]拼写错误 unemployment
[b5]这里应该是London
[b6]拼写错误 employment
[b7]这里改为 remained
各项细评：
针对问题最大的一点给出修改建议：
文章最大的问题就是词汇问题，考生可以多积累一些图表表达的词汇和句式，在写作中灵活运用。
附批改原图：
今天这位同学是图表作文，最大的问题是词汇拼写错误严重，其实整体还是很不错，这样的低级错误可要少犯啊，因为几个单词拉低了整篇文章的分数就太不值得了！
作文题目：
作文内容：
The line graph compared[b1] changes of unemployment among 16-24 age group with overall unemployment figures over a period of 20 years in England[b2] .
It is clear that those aged 16-24 who lived in London acoounted[b3] for the highest rate of unemploment[b4] throughout this period. And also, the percentage of unemployment among aged 16-24-year old people saw an overall upward trend over a period of 20 years, while the overall unemployment rate in London and the rest of England witnessed a slightly downward trend.
In 1993, around 22% of people aged 16-24 who lived in England[b5] were unemployed, while the same age group living in the rest of England stood at approximately 18%. However, the overall unemplyment[b6] rate in London and the rest of England was slightly lower, at 14% and 10% respectively. Over the next 10 years, there was a similarily downward trend seenamong the four different groups, reaching the lowest point in 2002.
From the 2002 onwards, the figures for those living in London and the rest of England held a [b7] steady at this level, at 8% and 9% respectively in 2012, despite of fluctuation between 2006 and 2009. However, there was a dramatically upward trend seen among those aged 16-24 between 2002 and 2012. The unemployment rate of 16-24 age group living in London and the rest of England saw a dramatically increase, from 15% to 25% and from 12% to 20 % respectively.
[b1]这里用原形 compares
[b2]这里对图表的表述有些问题，图表是四条线相互对比，改为the changes of the unemployed proportion rates in England from 1993 to 2012.
[b3]拼写错误 accounted
[b4]拼写错误 unemployment
[b5]这里应该是London
[b6]拼写错误 employment
[b7]这里改为 remained
各项细评：
针对问题最大的一点给出修改建议：
文章最大的问题就是词汇问题，考生可以多积累一些图表表达的词汇和句式，在写作中灵活运用。
附批改原图：
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